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unavail ( 男 , 51 )
地区: 美国, 加州
作者: unavail, 俱乐部:醉是音乐 [引文评论] [评论
时间: 2007-07-04 11:21:43, 来源:未名交友
标题: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever

爱的稻草人 --- onceforever 

在春天,我遇见了你
在夏天,我呵护着你
在秋天,我收获了你
在冬天,我失去了你
我立在孤独的田野
心如枯槁
身体里的水分
早已随着泪水风干
365
天的爱情
却要用一生的时间来遗忘
直到风将我吹倒在泥土里。。。

http://onceforever.blog.jiaoyou8.com/friends_diary/onceforever/0_0_0/view_01479468_no_0_0.html

Note: this is another short and not a bad one, and i like it.

※ 来源:Unknown Friends - 未名交友 http://us.jiaoyou8.com ※
xdjdmc ( 女 , 57 )
地区: 中国大陆, 江苏
作者: xdjdmc, 俱乐部:醉是音乐 [引文评论] [评论
时间: 2007-07-05 00:07:27, 来源:未名交友
标题: Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever

春永驻*

春播 夏长

秋收 冬藏

不必叹息

在冬的萧瑟;

不必借引

雪莱的诗句

只因为--

春永驻  若有爱

-----

* as a reply to your poem. wish you like. :)



【 --------------------原文-------------------- 】
: 作者:unavail, 俱乐部:醉是音乐
: 日期:2007-07-04 11:21:43, 来源:未名交友
: 标题:爱的稻草人 --- onceforever
:
: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever 

在春天,我遇见了你
在夏天,我呵护着你
在秋天,我收获了你
在冬天,我失去了你
我立在孤独的田野
心如枯槁
身体里的水分
早已随着泪水风干
365
天的爱情
却要用一生的时间来遗忘
直到风将我吹倒在泥土里。。。

http://onceforever.blog.jiaoyou8.com/friends_diary/onceforever/0_0_0/view_01479468_no_0_0.html

Note: this is another short and not a bad one, and i like it.



※ 最后修改者:xdjdmc, 修改于:2007-07-05 00:20:17 ※
※ 来源:Unknown Friends - 未名交友 http://us.jiaoyou8.com ※
unavail ( 男 , 51 )
地区: 美国, 加州
作者: unavail, 俱乐部:醉是音乐 [引文评论] [评论
时间: 2007-07-05 01:24:01, 来源:未名交友
标题: Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever

i have too many poetic books of several hundreds that i can't remember each of them quite very long time ago. the important thing is that we may refresh and enjoy some of them, in our busy schedules, in this vast amount of the beautiful writings in the history.

"... When I was in my 20th, rains or shines, reading and writing were my life. You can’t image how many verse books I collected (several hundred volumes) and how crazy I was in reading those books days and nights, as well as how unbelievably of those (a hundred) verses that I composed for a girl I like. Friends told me those are good pieces and I feel they sounded correct, but the sad thing is that I never have anything of those or others published, unlike my other prosperous publications..."

........

【 --------------------原文-------------------- 】
: 作者:xdjdmc, 俱乐部:醉是音乐
: 日期:2007-07-05 00:07:27, 来源:未名交友
: 标题:Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever
:
:

春永驻*

春播 夏长

秋收 冬藏

不必叹息

在冬的萧瑟;

不必借引

雪莱的诗句

只因为--

春永驻  若有爱

-----

* as a reply to your poem. wish you like. :)





※ 最后修改者:unavail, 修改于:2007-07-05 01:53:58 ※
※ 来源:Unknown Friends - 未名交友 http://us.jiaoyou8.com ※
xdjdmc ( 女 , 57 )
地区: 中国大陆, 江苏
作者: xdjdmc, 俱乐部:醉是音乐 [引文评论] [评论
时间: 2007-07-05 05:25:29, 来源:未名交友
标题: Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever

ah, really? i adore you, and a bit jealous of your passions in your youth. what you read and wrote must be very beatiful lines that cultivate you much. 

but i, on the contary, didn't know i can write some verse until over my  thirties. i never had special interest in poems or other forms of literature. when i was at school. Chinese,especially composition was my headache. How could i now sometimes write some poems? i think that is because i got to know the love, beginning with the love from God. my first poem was written in a thanksgiving afternoon, which is tittled by :"I didn't know the Lord before". I never forget that day when I was touched to tears(nobody sermoned to that day, I was just alone ), and can't stand not writing it out. Then i just can't stop, one after another....

some singer are original singer(never trained,but sing beatifully).so is the case i write poem. i think i need to read more poetric works, which may do good to my future writings.

and thank you for your shearing and comments.:)



【 --------------------原文-------------------- 】
: 作者:unavail, 俱乐部:醉是音乐
: 日期:2007-07-05 01:24:01, 来源:未名交友
: 标题:Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever
:
:

i have too many poetic books of several hundreds that i can't remember each of them quite very long time ago. the important thing is that we may refresh and enjoy some of them, in our busy schedules, in this vast amount of the beautiful writings in the history.

"... When I was in my 20th, rains or shines, reading and writing were my life. You can’t image how many verse books I collected (several hundred volumes) and how crazy I was in reading those books days and nights, as well as how unbelievably of those (a hundred) verses that I composed for a girl I like. Friends told me those are good pieces and I feel they sounded correct, but the sad thing is that I never have anything of those or others published, unlike my other prosperous publications..."

........



※ 来源:Unknown Friends - 未名交友 http://us.jiaoyou8.com ※

unavail ( 男 , 51 )
地区: 美国, 加州
作者: unavail, 俱乐部:醉是音乐 [引文评论] [评论
时间: 2007-07-05 10:30:40, 来源:未名交友
标题: Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever

this is true and i can see that. thanks and bless.

【 --------------------原文-------------------- 】
: 作者:xdjdmc, 俱乐部:醉是音乐
: 日期:2007-07-05 05:25:29, 来源:未名交友
: 标题:Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever
:
:

ah, really? i adore you, and a bit jealous of your passions in your youth. what you read and wrote must be very beatiful lines that cultivate you much. 

but i, on the contary, didn't know i can write some verse until over my  thirties. i never had special interest in poems or other forms of literature. when i was at school. Chinese,especially composition was my headache. How could i now sometimes write some poems? i think that is because i got to know the love, beginning with the love from God. my first poem was written in a thanksgiving afternoon, which is tittled by :"I didn't know the Lord before". I never forget that day when I was touched to tears(nobody sermoned to that day, I was just alone ), and can't stand not writing it out. Then i just can't stop, one after another....

some singer are original singer(never trained,but sing beatifully).so is the case i write poem. i think i need to read more poetric works, which may do good to my future writings.

and thank you for your shearing and comments.:)





※ 最后修改者:unavail, 修改于:2007-07-06 15:04:37 ※
※ 来源:Unknown Friends - 未名交友 http://us.jiaoyou8.com ※
unavail ( 男 , 51 )
地区: 美国, 加州
作者: unavail, 俱乐部:醉是音乐 [引文评论] [评论
时间: 2007-07-06 11:23:21, 来源:未名交友
标题: Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever

me too. it is in dormant state. once enlighted or delighted, it will be like a river flowing from inside. I remember I always copy my elder sister’s (who was 2 yrs older than me and was in same grade as mine.) composition when I was in primary and junior high. And I never know I can write well at later time. Right now, I can do whatever in a quick several minutes or 10-20 minutes to put anything in a page or two, projects, minutes, points and ponders, verses, or even diagramming something. Amazing, isn’t it. Also, anyone can be artist/musician or the music lover  when listening to  “Amazing Grace”, as no one will deny it is a beautiful song/tune.

Btw: for writing, rules of thumb: (1) be enjoyable. let your work be read for a thousand times by one user, not one time by a thousand users. (2) be succinct: short and easy to read. Try to be as short as possible, like sending a telegraph with each word counting for some money, as my Chinese mentors always told me long time ago, as people are impatient or don’t have much time to read a long one by keep moving mouse scrolling ball. (3) try to use as less words as possible, if this is creative writing, like poetry, etc. try to use image, picturesque, sound, graphic, motion, action,  time, space, etc, to express your feeling, emotion, ideas. (4)…


【 --------------------原文-------------------- 】
: 作者:xdjdmc, 俱乐部:醉是音乐
: 日期:2007-07-05 05:25:29, 来源:未名交友
: 标题:Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever
:
:

ah, really? i adore you, and a bit jealous of your passions in your youth. what you read and wrote must be very beatiful lines that cultivate you much. 

but i, on the contary, didn't know i can write some verse until over my  thirties. i never had special interest in poems or other forms of literature. when i was at school. Chinese,especially composition was my headache. How could i now sometimes write some poems? i think that is because i got to know the love, beginning with the love from God. my first poem was written in a thanksgiving afternoon, which is tittled by :"I didn't know the Lord before". I never forget that day when I was touched to tears(nobody sermoned to that day, I was just alone ), and can't stand not writing it out. Then i just can't stop, one after another....

some singer are original singer(never trained,but sing beatifully).so is the case i write poem. i think i need to read more poetric works, which may do good to my future writings.

and thank you for your shearing and comments.:)



【 --------------------原文-------------------- 】
: 作者:unavail, 俱乐部:醉是音乐
: 日期:2007-07-05 01:24:01, 来源:未名交友
: 标题:Re: 爱的稻草人 --- onceforever
:
:

i have too many poetic books of several hundreds that i can't remember each of them quite very long time ago. the important thing is that we may refresh and enjoy some of them, in our busy schedules, in this vast amount of the beautiful writings in the history.

"... When I was in my 20th, rains or shines, reading and writing were my life. You can’t image how many verse books I collected (several hundred volumes) and how crazy I was in reading those books days and nights, as well as how unbelievably of those (a hundred) verses that I composed for a girl I like. Friends told me those are good pieces and I feel they sounded correct, but the sad thing is that I never have anything of those or others published, unlike my other prosperous publications..."

........



※ 最后修改者:unavail, 修改于:2007-07-06 11:44:15 ※
※ 来源:Unknown Friends - 未名交友 http://us.jiaoyou8.com ※

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